Incursion by Lauren L. Garcia
My rating: 2 of 5 stars
I received this from the publisher for a review and my honest opinion.
I just want to start off this review by saying that I didn't hate this book. In fact, there were parts that I really liked. What I didn't care for was the structure and the lack of description. Aside from the fact that Kali was injured and had dark hair and Stonewall was a burly soldier-type, I couldn't tell you anything else about the characters. I couldn't tell you who half the supporting cast was, or why their stories were important. The only thing I can figure is that they'll have bigger, more substantial roles in later books.
I've been reading a lot of books on story structure lately, because I know it's something that I definitely need to work on. In this, the characters had several misadventures, but nothing added up to a big climax at the end. There was no real antagonist to keep the main characters from their goal of reaching Whitewater City (Canderi, maybe?), and the threat and stakes didn't feel like they were much risk. I kept expecting some of the people that Kali and Stonewall stopped to help to betray them, but betray them from what? They weren't trying to do anything except get to the city. I think if Kali had been a bit more anxious to get away from Stonewall there may have been more opportunities for conflict, but she was almost too agreeable.
I think this was a valiant first effort in a book series, I just wish that there had been more at stake. Perhaps in later books, and this is just the first rumble of a full-on revolution for the Mages?
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